AfriGeneas Writers Forum
Critique by George
In Response To: The Gift: ( How I Got Over ) ()
Are we, the readers, to assume that you are 55 years old?
If we assume that you are telling the story today, where are you telling it from (location)?
If a brother and sister were added to the family before Elvis left, where did the other sister come from?
In the first sentence 'gift' should be plural.
You mention that you discovered a gift - that's got me intrigued! And you mention an 'emotional feeling that connected you to the spiritual part of life' - that's got me curious!
Looking forward to more.
Thanx so much for the critique.