AfriGeneas Writers Forum
Re: Walker & James Edward GOINS
In Response To: Walker & James Edward GOINS ()
I am enjoying your story and I'm witnessing your biggest challenge - that of being a researcher or being a story teller.
Your opening sentence put me in a visual mode (or mood). I was thinking of the time of day when that momentous event occurred.
You could pare down paragraph two by stating that Walker is 25 and his brother James is 18 and still living with his parents. What was Walker probably doing (according to the census) in 1864?
Again, assuming that I (the reader) know a little about some of the battles, just tell me of the battles Walker and James (or their respective troops) were in. Did they ever fight on the same day? How far apart were they?
Flesh out the characters, toss in some dates and you got a fascinating story!
Two brothers leaving their families to fight for the freedom of their people - and you have the documents and research to base it in facts - it doesn't get much better than that!